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So she is the favourite with all the family!

  My favourite animal is cat,so(這樣子好點 不用那麼多句號的) I have a cat.Her name is MiMi.She comes from China and she lives in my home(用house更確切 另外she comes form China你想表達怎樣的意思呢).She is very small.She has two eyes ,two ears ,a nose and a mouth.(每隻貓都有的 建議刪除)My mother always(加一個“總是”好一點) calls her (此處應該用賓格 另外is不需要 call sb. sth 就可以咯)"little baby". MiMi likes to eat fish,but she doesn”t eat vagetables(用蔬菜vagetables比較好). She likes runing and climbing .She is clever.  

So she is the favourite with all the family!=>So cats are famous for most family!所以貓對多數家庭來說都是受歡迎的。

  如果在原文改的話應該是這樣子 但是它讓你講的 我最愛的動物  

你的文章裡面只講你的貓貓 沒有講貓這種動物是怎麼樣的  

而且也沒有講明 貓比較明顯的一些特徵 建議可以重新寫寫看!~

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